Hey and Welcome Back to R.J.’s Rewrites.
Welcome to Pt. 2
Last time, things got a little lengthy so I decided to split it. PREVIOUSLY:
Again, a disclaimer,
*I ENJOY THIS MOVIE. IN SPITE OF HOW I MAY FEEL, I, IN GOOD FAITH, CANNOT SAY A FILM IS BAD IF I SPENT MY OWN MONEY TO OWN A COPY OF IT*
Again, I won’t be going over everything in the film, just the things I would change. Assume everything else works just the way it is.
That said… Let’s get back to it!
- TRASH COM-PHASMA
Finn, Han and Chewie all get aboard the base and still tackle Phasma just the same. They remove her helmet as a way to get a mean stare down and for us, the audience, to actually SEE Gwendoline Christie in costume.
This whole star-studded cast and she could’ve been anyone with all of her lines dubbed in later with ADR. Let’s see her!
Anyway, scene plays out like normal, only now, instead of being remarkably compliant, she starts to lower the shields…then, as the three are discussing plans, when Finn says, “Solo, if this works, we’re not going to have a lot of time to find Rey”, she tries to quickly tries to fire a hidden, side blaster, but quickly has her cheek sizzled by a scathing shot!
Behind her, a hole in a wall steamed and Han is seen with his blaster. (Yes, he shoots first.) Finn knocks her out with a rifle butt and, as the sequence was already started, they finish it and still wind up putting her in the trash compactor.
Minor tweaks, but for the love of God, let’s SEE Phasma DO SOMETHING.
ALSO, again, I’m saying this with the benefit of hindsight, IT’S REVEALED IN THE LAST JEDI THAT HER ARMOR PLATING REFLECTS BLASTER BOLTS!
SHE WAS NEVER IN ANY DANGER! WHY WAS SHE SO COMPLIANT THEN? IF FINN THREATENED TO “BLAST THAT BUCKET OFF YOUR HEAD” WHY DIDN’T SHE JUST SAY YES AND LET IT RICOCHET!??
YEAH, FINN EVENTUALLY DOES PUT THE BLASTER UNDER HER HELMET, BUT THAT’S WAAAAY AFTER THE FACT.
- HAN SO-LONG
…okay, there’s no way to do this without laying down some ground rules. Okay, first off, Kylo killing Han? I’m okay with. It served his character and affected him all the way into his sequel. It mattered. Did I want it? Not particularly, but Harrison Ford apparently did and I respect his decision and everyone’s involved to honor it and not have him…well, fridged.
Now, this can work one of two ways, one of them being the way that it was filmed and leave it as is. I’m still seriously okay with it. Maybe telegraphed, maybe easy to see, don’t care. It worked for me. I’m fine with it.
However, if I were to change it, it would all be the same up until that pivotal moment.
“I know what I have to do, but I don’t know if I have the strength to do it… Will you help me?”
Kylo pulls out his lightsaber hilt, starts to hand it to Han and when the light fades…
To his knee, Ben is shot on his side! From above, from Chewie’s bowcaster, he fired.
“Chewie could always tell when he was up to no good…”
It shocks both Han and everyone around them, but the commotion snaps Han out of it and he runs back to everyone else and everyone runs away like normal, only, now, Kylo is more furious because he didn’t kill Han Solo when he could have and he sees the one directly responsible.
- DARK FOREST
They all make for the Falcon with Han being told to go as he’s the one Ren wants. He reluctantly goes but Chewie, Finn and Rey all stay behind. Chewie sees Ren, is the first to shoot, but, anticipating this, Ren reflects the bolt back at him and holds him with the Force and sends him flying past countless trees until he hits the trunk of the thickest one, knocking him unconscious.
“We’re not done yet.”
“You’re a monster!”
“It’s just us now. Han Solo can’t save you!” He says as Han is away getting the Falcon. Punches his side, indicating he’s still bleeding out.
Rey tries to fire, Kylo NOPE’s her into a tree, like Chewie and the fight ensues again, only this time with the GREEN lightsaber. Seeing it, Kylo still says,
“That lightsaber… It belongs to me!” This would play into the fact that Kylo, feeling triumphant and bold in his attack on Luke and his temple took Luke’s lightsaber, much like Vader did after killing Jedi in his time.
Finn has his trophy and he wants it back.
“Come get it!” They fight. Finn, after already learning how to use it on Takodana, fares much better than before, but the fight still ends the same.
- REY OF HOPE
Yeah, no. I’d change NOTHING about the way she grabbed the lightsaber. Going with how she experimented with the Force before and even now, in the film as is, she looks at it confused and looks at Kylo Ren SCARED AS HELL! She’s CLEARLY out of her element and not one part of that looks like she’s ready to take dude on.
Grade A shit there, guys.
Before I continue, we ALL seem to forget how the fight starts and just linger on how it ends. She’s swinging it wildly and unfocused. Yeah, Ren is doing so, too, but, remember the fact that HE’S LITERALLY DYING!??
He’s bleeding out!
There’s a lot of space between them. Kylo has proven he has a temper, but this kid isn’t trying to kill her. He is just sizing her up.
Again. Grade A shit.
So, what I would change is after Rey strikes Kylo and he finally falls, she would go over to him and try to finish him off, showing more anger in the moment as Kylo tried to kill the only father she’d ever known, but that is when the ground splits and everything is as follows.
The whole “you need a teacher; I can show you the ways of the Force” would be more natural now because her moment with Kylo and experimenting with it from the interrogation scene already transpired.
With Rey being driven with anger and her proclaiming he was the monster, she would show signs of parallels, questioning who is really right and wrong.
Hux goes to Snoke and gets Ren so he can finish his training and Han goes to get Finn, Rey and Chewie, but the ground is splitting far too much for any more time to be spent.
Han tries to get him, screaming at Chewie to come on, but Chewie knows he can’t. This is it for him. He roars at him to go and the three in the Falcon reluctantly leave Chewie behind.
It’s just to pay homage to Chewie’s death in the books, and, hey, it’s better than a moon being thrown at him, amiright?
- RESISTANCE – REGROUP
The survivors regroup on the base and Han and Leia hold each other knowing their lifelong friend is gone. Finn gets taken care of and Rey, with Han now, boards the Falcon to go find Luke.
- DON’T CALL IT A COMEBACK
Rey climbs all the steps to find Luke standing solemnly alone. Dude turns around and he sees the hilt of the GREEN LIGHTSABER in her hand, knowing it was taken when Kylo had his crusade against him and his temple.
She looks at him, longingly as a long-lost relative finding a home, or she looking for a place to belong.
But Luke doesn’t look back.
The last shot of him we’ll get is him turning away, eyes heavy as if negativity and The Dark Side itself is weighing him down.
That lost look, with Rey still reaching out is how it…
So, what do you think? Would you change anything? Love it? Hate it? Give your honest opinions and more in the comment section or on my twitter @RJFAQS
May the Force be with You…because we’re gonna need it to get through the Rise of Skywalker.